General A Poem I Wrote (Opinions Please) Unfinished .

[Trojanz 382]

 

                           If hearts could speak for themselves.

I'm trying to fill my self in , Of why I love you and this strong feeling 

I have within . I'm trying to fill my self in , About why I care so much about a girl who

doesn't really express her feelings . I'm trying to fill my self in , Why am I like this ? 

Am I dreaming? AM trying to figure things out , why am I always at ease , when you're around.

 

 

I'm seeing things clearly , but I don't understand it all .

I'm seeing my self fall for you daily , with you is where I belong.

Alot of time has passed by , You're the one who brought me back to life ,  Sometimes 

I wonder if your frankenstein.

 

Being with you is one of those Amazing moments in my life , I have a feeling 

You're King Midas's daughter , because every since you touch my soul , My future turned Gold.

 

You're all that matters , I'll do whatever is right . 

I'll protect you even If I have to give up my life 

Put it as this , A Viking Vs A Thousand Knights .

 

You mean the world to me , All this I'm saying to you runs deeply .

I never thought this would come to reality , being with the girl of my dreams was once

my fantacy.

Updated August 2, 2015 by Trojanz

[Ky1e 3k]

#inb4crushed

[spiritswithin 24]

Very good! The only thing I would fix is the spaces where the commas are.

[Guest]

Frankenstein part is funny and wierd The poem is very good! Nice job! Updated August 2, 2015 by Guest

[Klepto 7.7k]

King Mildas?

 

Did you mean Midas?

 

 

Nonetheless, sounds pretty good

[Trojanz 382]

King Mildas?

 

Did you mean Midas?

 

 

Nonetheless, sounds pretty good

Yes Midas ** Made some mistakes in it lol. Glad someone knows history

[Klepto 7.7k]

Yes Midas ** Made some mistakes in it lol. Glad someone knows history

Im a Greek Mythology Junkie

[Guest]

Your future would've turned into gold #IKnowHistoryToo Updated August 2, 2015 by Guest

[Trojanz 382]

Your future would've turned into gold #IKnowHistoryToo

You're right .  But i need someone to rhyme . I'm listening to music so i'm blank

[Rook 551.3k Donor]

For who is this for?